Today the Sailors Where going to do there second Test The Captain was going to Meet them at the Docks by the Time the Captain had gotten to The Docks the Crew had already gotten everything Ready the Captain was Very Surprised By what had happened when he Saw the Boat At the Docks So when he Bordered the Boat all the Crew went to meet him half a hour latter the Crew where already at sea But with No training It was amazing and The Captain went for a Nap When the Captain woke up 10 Minutes Latter To a Bang The Crew where all asleep to The Crew had hit another Ship so The Boat Was very Damaged and the Captain went to go and Wake up the rest of the Crew Memebers
Hi Everyone This Week like last Monday i am Writing a Story But this Week Thought i Would Switch it Up So this Week i am Only Writing Another half of My Story This Week I hope you enjoy this Weeks Writing If you Would Like to Try and guess whats going to happen For Weeks Writing You can Write it in the Comments Box Down Below Bye till next time everyone Bye !!!!
He is a very trusting captain to go and have a nap so soon into the voyage. I feel like that could only lead to disaster! You have used no punctuation in here at all, try to reread your work, put a full stop where your idea ends and a new one begins e.g. Today, the sailors were going to do their second test. The captain was going to meet them at the docks.
ReplyDeleteCorrect punctuation helps the reader to make sense of what they read :)